Monday, 14 February 2011

The Outline, The Premise, The Log Line and Character Biographies



  1. Interim Online Review 15/02/2011

    Hey Kolade,

    Firstly, I hope you're all recovered now.
    Secondly, my mouth waters rather at the richness of your story idea; it feels ancient and passed down generationally; indeed, it feels like 'relic' or artefact. It does scare me too! I'm thinking of the one minute running time and, particularly in terms of all that your various characters have to accomplish - both physically and symbolically. One way to accelerate your set-up would be to use narration or voice-track, a way of cementing for the uninitiated audience the significance etc. of what is happening? A voice track would certainly enable you to set up the problem of the stolen rooster - without have to show any of that - it could be presented as having happened; obviously, the forecaster of doom could also give all of this back-story away too.

    I want to see you moving very quickly towards boarding out your story and getting to grips with its 'time-based' requirements. You've got multiple characters and, in Act 3, what appears to be a dual narrative. These are big challenges, and I want you to meet them creatively - but be prepared to cut, cut, cut if to do so becomes necessary.

    I look forward too to seeing what your visual concept might be for this piece - I'm already seeing it playing out in my head; indeed, it reminds of the Firebird sequence from Fantasia 2000:

    (I'll be showing this sequence on the big screen as part of Unit 5 - it's spectacular in surround sound...)

    Can you get your essay proposal and into up here and '@Phil' asap?

  2. i agree. the story sounds great. the perfect ending of saving his lovers life :)

  3. Hi,

    I know you're horribly busy, but I'm just prompting you to complete the Student Survey 2011 - see link below! Many thanks!